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I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 4:02 pm
by adrian
This isn't where we should discuss this... not here... not amongst these walls. Brick. Brick. Another brick stacked on another. Clumsilly mudded together..
Oh if these walls could talk.. some say...
sometimes these walls do talk! at least for moments they used to.. well this one at least
brick, brick, and another..
its not really the voice behind the wall i was affraid of.. it was the one outside it...
the one with me... right here beside me, behind, in front, all around, and sometimes in and out of me, through me as if i'm made up of holes... but then only few times
I'm not proud of this wall
The voice behind it didn't last too much longer.. a day or so..
i lasted longer because i ate.. i couldn't get a plate through that wall if i wanted to.. not even water
the mud is dry now.
the voice had become faint
not her voice though
she keeps rambling on about how he ruined he dress
its ok voice, he won't be able to ruin any one's dresses anymore...
the thing is... i liked the way she suffered
i liked it so much that i sent him to her..
she left like a coward... i say left but its more like she has become trapped
like this house is a spider web she sways in and out of
thats ok...
i liked the way she suffered
so i built this wall to quiet him down... over a few days of course
i sent him to her
i sent him here...
away from me, to her, but still around.. get it?
brick, brick, and another
she'll suffer soon, soon after his voice stops behind the wall

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 4:23 pm
by NeverMore
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Ummm... correct me if I'm wrong, but did you write this during the Clinton administration :?: :?

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 4:27 pm
by adrian
hahahaha nah... just now bored at work actually...

about a husband who forced his wife to suicide...
the guy narrorating become annoyed by the ghost of the mans wife

so he found the husband... bricked him up behind a wall... and sent him BACK to his wife lol

ehhh.. just bored

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 4:31 pm
by NeverMore
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Read it again, keeping in mind what I said. Funny how a story's meaning can change based on what's in your head at the moment. :lol:

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 5:20 pm
by Spookymufu
sounds like a cross of a few edgar allan poe stories.....

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:18 pm
by adrian
Nevermore- HAHAHAHAHAHAHA ok i getcha lol

and Spooky- you know... i love poetry and have read Edgar Allen Poe before and remember liking him... but i can't remember one poem he or any other poet for that matter has written LOL

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:33 pm
by Spookymufu
well then Adrian, you know what you have to do.....

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:34 pm
by NeverMore
adrian wrote:Nevermore- HAHAHAHAHAHAHA ok i getcha lol

and Spooky- you know... i love poetry and have read Edgar Allen Poe before and remember liking him... but i can't remember one poem he or any other poet for that matter has written LOL
Ahemm! Look to the left, then look at my nym.

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:35 pm
by adrian
i must go forth and read as much as possible.....

or think of stuff that doesn't sound like some one else's....
did he really write some thing like this?

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:37 pm
by NeverMore
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It does tend to remind me of 'The Telltale Heart'.

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:38 pm
by Spookymufu
he had a poem called the tell tale heart where the beating heart of his victim under then floor boards drove the killer insane, and there was another one (I forget the name) where the husband bricks up his wife in the wall (or something like that) I might need to go read again myself....

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 6:58 pm
by adrian
well darn lol

this was just a little free style writing... sorry guys

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 7:01 pm
by NeverMore
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I still liked my interpretation of your story :wink:

Time to go down to the stadium. Y'all have a good night.

Go Chargers!!!

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 7:06 pm
by adrian
have fun buddy :)

Re: I Liked the Way She Suffered

Posted: Mon Oct 19, 2009 7:25 pm
by Spookymufu
thats it Adrian, I'm turning you into the Edgar Allan Poe society for ripping him off :)